How I Will Tackle The Rest of This Essay

I got a lot of great, constructive feedback on my essay, and I completely agree with the suggestions. I need to analyze all of the information that I present in the essay instead of just simply stating it. It is not enough to state facts and leave them there to speak for themselves; you have to explain what they mean and why they are relevant. I also need to make the essay as a whole flow better because as of this moment it is quite choppy.
Overall, I love the feedback that I got and am going to make those changes ASAP
Have a dope weekend!