final draft

Based on the feedback I received I plan on developing my argument more and making certain parts of my essay more clear. I also think I need to make my thesis a bit more obvious to the reader. There's a a lot I still need to add to my final draft such as the methods of my experiment that I conducted and an analysis of the results. After the feedback given I realized that there's still a lot more I could add to help support my hypothesis and make my argument sound more convincing. Overall the feedback I received was very helpful and I will definitely be taking it into account when I'm adding the finishing touches to my final draft.