I think I definitely improved on my use of adjectives. One of the people who read my first draft told me I needed to replace the word “very” with something else here and there. Instead, I took it to the next level. I replaced every instance of the word “very” with a different word, making my use of adjectives much, much stronger. I found that by doing that, and keeping that in mind, I would automatically stop myself from typing the word and would instead write another adjective in its place before I even typed the letter “v.”
The most important thing I learned from this project is to not be afraid of bringing your own thoughts and ideas into your essay; it is what separates your essay from somebody else’s. I chose to include examples of some of my favorite scenes throughout the movie (which I have seen loads of times) to exemplify different points I was making. I learned to make the essay my own, since it is my own essay.
If I had another week to work on my essay, I would probably work on the organization. I will admit, I didn’t organize it well in the beginning, which really made it hard for me to organize it in the end. Had I organized it in the beginning, I would have only had to work with about 700 words as opposed to over 1700.
If I could rewrite the project prompt in the syllabus, I would probably change it to comparing real events with historical fictions inspired by them. We could compare the actual sinking of the Titanic to the movie, or look at biographical movies like Milk and Mandela and compare them to the real events that took place. We could then dissect how and why writers and film creators would get creative with the story line.
Hi Ryan
ReplyDeleteYour suggestion for the prompt is fantastic and it will definitely be taken into consideration! I'm happy to see that the peer review has helped you and that you're learning to make your writing pieces your own.