Chapter 9 part 1

So the revising section is a bit...I think I'm hitting an issue caused by so much time away from academic writing. For example, the author's statement seems to be the actual review itself. It covers the parts of the film the author wants to talk about in reasonable detail, to the point that an additional review seems almost redundant.

As well, while the chapter shows Gwen's responses to the evaluations/criticisms, we never get to see the actual criticisms themselves, which I feel deprives the reader of valuable examples of the kinds of criticisms we should be striving to offer. We don't see anything that prompted any of the changes Gwen is making, just that they were sufficient enough to prompt changes. It's half the story, and from my point of view, not the half I most wanted to see.